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Free Admission to Museums

Nowadays,the pulic are given access to more and more museums without entrance
tickets.
Some people hold the view that it will【 bring ——bring about引起；导致】 some problems. First of all, museums need money to support themselves . Since many admission tickets have been cancelled, most museums may get into trouble【 in management and in repair】【because of 】lacking of fund. Then it will results in a more serious consequence that the 【 museums】 feel weak in many activities and 【 exhibitions 】which are open to the public without restriction. So the damage 【is——may be表述更中肯 】 done to the public themselves in turn.
In my eyes , free admission to museums benefits the public. In that
way, everyone has a chance to enter the museums to 【add——help enrich 】 their knowledge and 【open their eyes——broaden their horizons 】. Everyone, poor or rich, has 【a——an 】equal right to involve in cultural exchange which can 【erich man’s ——make their】 inner life【full】 .In a large sense ,it contributes to the spiritual civilization construction. Although the trend may lead to heavy cost 【of ——for】museums , the government should give them powerful support not only in finance but also in policy , for museums can’t develop well 【only】 on their own strengths.
In summary , I suppose free admisson to museums is very necessary
and important.
祝你开心如意！

如今，社会公众获得越来越多的博物馆，没有门票。
有些人持这样的观点，它会带来一些问题（原因）。首先，博物馆需要钱来养活自己。由于许多入场券已被取消，大多数的博物馆可能会惹上麻烦，缺乏资金。然后，它会导致更严重的后果，是向公众开放的博物馆的感觉（？）弱许多活动和展览（S）没有。因此，损害的是自己的公共反过来。
在我的眼里，免费参观博物馆惠及市民。这样一来，每个人都有机会进入博物馆（增加）自己的知识和打开他们的眼睛（头脑）。每个人，穷人还是富人，拥有平等的权利，包括在文化的交流（S），它可以埃里希（丰富）人的内心生活。在一个大的（大）的意义，它有利于精神文明建设的（项目），虽然（尽管时）的趋势可能会导致沉重的代价博物馆，强大的支持，应该给他们（可以）不仅在融资但在政策，为博物馆不能发展好自己的长处（删除字）
总之，我认为，博物馆免费admisson是非常必要和重要的。

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